Thursday, February 10, 2011

First Draft

It was getting dark and the clouds were getting darker and darker by the moment. He was in the middle of nowhere even though Singapore a so small with nowhere left to save. He looked around the area with his eagle eye but only saw roads so long that it was like it could not be ended. The most mysterious thing was that there were not one single car, and there was total silent. He can even hear his breathing. Where am I, his head was full of unanswered question.

Just when he thought it could not get any worse, guess again, it started raining cats and dogs. He was soaking wet and felt cold. Suddenly, not of nowhere was a flash of lights. It looked like the police, or the ambulance or …… When the vehicle got closer, he saw it and immediately stand in the middle of the road to make it stop. The taxi saw it and stop. He went inside and the driver gave him a towel. He said thanks and the driver continue to drive.

The driver kept the light away from him and made it very hard to see him. He wanted to asked the unanswered questions, but the words would not budge and there was nothing he could do. He just said the destination that he wanted to go and did not say anything anymore. Suddenly, black clouds covered the sky and I saw that the driver evil smile with the help of some lights coming from outside the taxi. He had a scare below his mouth and a tattoo on his neck.
That was all I could describe the driver before he drove me behind the bushes and tree. The bushes and tree was tall and big and also dark. It felt like a nightmare. Was he going to rob me? He thought of it in his head. Suddenly the driver turned around and said that his taxi was out of fuel and needed to refill at the nearby petrol station. The diver told him to wait while he go and called for help. The driver also said something important and wanted him to obey.

DO NOT OPEN THE DOOR FOR ANYONE!

The driver left with this sentence. He waited and waited for hours and hours. For the first two hour, he slept at the passenger seat in the back, but the driver was still missing. He was almost bored to death in the fourth hour when suddenly I knock was heard on top of the taxi. He woke up with excitement. Could it be the driver? But he told me not to let other people in except him, what should I do? He asked himself. In the end, he decided to ignore the knocking. 1…2…3… There was no more of the knocking sound.

He became so confuse and his head was full of curiosity that he open the door. He looked up of the taxi and fainted. There are blue and red light all over the place. He woke up. One of a police came to him and asked for details of the incident. He told them everything and asked for the name of the place. The police replied that this was a new highway which is still under construction. The police also asked the reason of his fainting experience. He saw only a head, and that was the only reply he made and would not talk more about it.

2 comments:

  1. Your story is very interesting with so much mysteries and also very captivating as I cannot stop reading until the end. Your setting is clearly being described and your climax is very clear too and u had a ending which is unique as you let the reader decide what the ending would be. Overall, Good Job
    John Loh 2O2

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  2. the story is very good and it keeps the readers in suspense, besides, the story is also very clear and we knows clearly that that the climax is near and when it is going to end.

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